(Poetry Tag) Night into Dreams

The Night opens, the day is closed
Then my eyes find that vision
Hidden in clouds of white and gold
That vision of you


Entrigue, I TAG YOU

Don't forget to tag someone after your turn!!

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Shawn "Loc Da'Borg" Jackson
http://www.shawndaborg.com

Black people have become somewhat racist within themselves to a certain degree; it pisses me off to hear from a black person "she's pretty to be a dark skinned girl". As if dark skinned girls aren't pretty. BLACK IS BEAUTIFUL IN EVERY WAY!!!!!! - tatiana23

Lil' Soul

I see how you muthafvckers are.. Let me or Loc or maybe Maaarf fvck up a Poetry Tag rule.. even one that is still not clearly defined.. and we get our asses handed to us with hate posts right..? But let a woman come in and jack the rules all up.. and nothing is said. Punks.

Nice addition Speak.. but I totally don't identify with those lines on breasts and splashing insides.. Unisex baby girl.. Dudes are contributing to this singular vision too.

no1uvintrest

i agree...^^ it was a nice contribution... but the guys ARE here miss Speak lol

Lil' Soul

You ROCK.. Now.. I know I’m not the most poetic minded cat out there.. and I don’t really know what bars are.. So perhaps you can say something about the length. Get her Stylze!!

Speak2free

Sorry, I didnt know the rules...thought you just wrote what you felt...somebody wrote about a fat dyk so...I did my thing...anyway...I changed it....latta

no1uvintrest

mkay... i'll clarify in the signup thread @ Soul..
and i know Speak sorry about that, but this was the first one of its kind here on the board... lol

Lil' Soul

I hear you, and feel your pain.. Just had to make sure there was no sexual profiling discrimination going on here. You saw Stylze bite my head off when I tagged Loc. That sh!t was not EVEN cool.. I barely got that jazz sewed back on in time, and now everyone jokingly asks if I was attacked by vampires or something. I’m totally humiliated.

Besides.. I know how you love being spanked anyway..

Locutus 2.0

To give an example of another stanza that would have worked to follow... is Jess's stanza:

though i no longer desire an "us"
i think im due the time wasted
since tainted love and broken trust
is now my new vision


It follows the original one in flow... and in length, theme, and rhythmic variance