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A Murder of Crows
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I just wrote this... on the fly... 10 mins it took...
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I stooped upon the hilltop, looking down at all below
I came upon a shattered jar, reaping what I sow
I stood upon that grassy hill, looking to the stars
Had I finally found the peace that eluded me from afar?
Had I found that which I searched for, all the days of my life?
Would I take that final footstep, and step into the light?
Was my heart always meant to be broken, in the light of the dawn?
Was my soul meant to be trampled on, my broken dreams, my sorrow song?
Will I hold the light in my hands? The essence of love?
Or will I continue to be put upon, my head hanging, tears falling, empty of love?
Why does the crow caw, caw, caw? Does it see my heart break?
Why do I hurt myself continuously? From this nightmare, will I wake?
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Meh... I can't even pretend there is a deep meaning to that. Don't post any poems you made in ten minutes.

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Dude, I'm using allegories to convey my sadness. I've been feeling it alot this past year.

Maybe you just don't have the fortitude to be empathic?
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Very Nice Locutus359!

The thing about poetry, Spoken words, and/or lyrics they are expressions of an individual....they dont have to make sense to everyone else...but the one who is expressing them.
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What...that makes perfect sence. I like it...
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Re: A Murder of Crows

I like the allegories. Draws nice parallels. Effective diction and nice flow
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